HSPA Language Arts Tutorial Cluster 3: Revising & Editing

Sample 3 - Writing Sample Scoring "1"

The following  writing sample for the Revise/Edit prompt scored a "1" based on the Revising/Editing Scoring Rubric.  

Scorers made the following comments about the sample below:

This sample misses several errors. There are no recommendations for developing the continuity or flow of the essay. There are no suggestions for adding to the sophistication of sentence structure, and no vivid language is offered. An attempt is made to create a stronger conclusion.